From 93ab735fd41211860dcb5fb82f3664548602ab0a Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: apezio <apexio@gmail.com>
Date: Sun, 10 Sep 2017 15:06:20 -0700
Subject: [PATCH] Update index.html

Monero is secure
Do we really want the first sentence about the security of Monero to include "extremely difficult to hack and steal your funds. "  To me that doesn't sound safe for large amounts if it's only "extremely difficult"... and why mention "hack" and "steal" at all?  Further, if you are trying to define "decentralized cryptocurrency" the definition is absolutely NOT "extremely difficult to hack and steal your funds.".  You could say the same of cash in a bank vault, an ATM machine, a centralized currency, or the safe in my basement...  Those are all "extremely difficult to hack and steal" from.  It seems to me we should be explaining what decentralized cryptocurrency is and perhaps stating it's the safest method known to mankind to store value, outside of Fort Knox.  Not that its hard to hack and steal!


Monero is fungible - if we're going to say it's untraceable above, we may as well remove the whole "In its current state, it is extremely unlikely that Monero will ever be..." and just bluntly state that it will never be blacklisted due to previous association.  Also, very few people know what fungible even means, so I have added the definition so people know what they're reading.
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index e86e691e..e00740df 100644
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@@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ Title: Home
                     <div class="row middle-xs info-block-row private">
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12  why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is secure.</h3>
-                            <p>Monero is a decentralized cryptocurrency, meaning it is extremely difficult to hack and steal your funds. Transactions are confirmed by distributed consensus, and then immutably recorded on the blockchain. Third-parties do not need to be trusted to keep your Monero safe. </p>
+                                <p>Monero is a decentralized cryptocurrency, meaning secure digital cash powered by an open network of users. Transactions are confirmed by distributed consensus, and then immutably recorded on the blockchain. You are the bank - no one knows how much you have or how you spend it. </p>
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-4 col-xs-12 last-sm first-xs center-xs">
                             <img src="/img/secure-monero.png" alt="Secure safe" class="main-icon">
@@ -52,7 +52,7 @@ Title: Home
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12 why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is private.</h3>
-                            <p>Monero uses ring signatures and ring confidential transactions to obfuscate the amounts, origins, and destinations of all transactions. Monero gains all the benefits of a decentralized cryptocurrency, without any of the standard privacy concessions. </p>
+                            <p>Monero uses ring signatures and ring confidential transactions to obfuscate the amounts, origins, and destinations of all transactions. Monero provides all the benefits of a decentralized cryptocurrency, without any of the privacy concessions. </p>
                         </div>
                         
                     </div>
@@ -71,7 +71,7 @@ Title: Home
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12 why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is fungible.</h3>
-                            <p> Monero is fungible because it is private by default. In its current state, it is extremely unlikely that Monero will ever be blacklisted by exchanges or vendors due to its association in previous transactions.</p>
+                            <p> Monero is fungible because it is private by default. This means no one can tell one Monero from another Monero. Monero will never be blacklisted by exchanges or vendors because there is no association to previous transactions.</p>
                         </div>
                     </div>
                 </div>
@@ -155,7 +155,7 @@ Title: Home
                         <div class="row center-xs">
                             <div class="col">
                                 <h2>Moneropedia</h2>
-                                <p class="main-resources">Would you like to look up the meanings of the terms and concepts used in Monero? Here you will find an alphabetical list of terms and their meanings from both the Monero and Kovri projects.</p>
+                                <p class="main-resources">An open encyclopedia which demystifies Monero and cryptocurrency.  Here you will find an alphabetical guide to terms and their meanings from both the Monero and Kovri projects.</p>
                                 <p><a href="/resources/moneropedia/" class="btn-link btn-auto">Read Moneropedia</a></p>
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