From 602e4c29e19ae16074a8db45a46847b0c47e6e59 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: tyrionmcmaster <31110358+tyrionmcmaster@users.noreply.github.com>
Date: Wed, 23 Aug 2017 12:14:55 -0400
Subject: [PATCH] Update index.html

Thank you everyone for your input. Please let me know if this is an improvement.
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@@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ Title: Home
                         <div class="main-info">
                             <h1 id="main-h1">Monero</h1>
                             <h2 id="main-h2">Private Digital Currency</h2>
-                            <p id="main-text">Monero is a secure, private and untraceable cryptocurrency. It is open-source and accessible to all. With Monero, you are your own bank. Only 
+                            <p id="main-text">Monero is a secure, private, and untraceable cryptocurrency. It is open-source and accessible to all. With Monero, you are your own bank. Only 
                             you control and are responsible for your funds. Your accounts 
                             and transactions are kept private from prying eyes.</p>
                             <p><a href="/get-started/using/" class="btn-link btn-auto btn-primary">Get Started</a></p>
@@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ Title: Home
                     <div class="row middle-xs info-block-row private">
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12  why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is secure.</h3>
-                            <p>Monero cannot be hacked to steal your funds, due to its decentralized nature. Only you are responsible for securing your Monero.</p>
+                            <p>Monero is a decentralized cryptocurrency, meaning it is extremely difficult to hack and steal your funds. Transactions are confirmed by distributed consensus, and then immutably recorded on the blockchain. Third-parties do not need to be trusted to keep your Monero safe. </p>
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-4 col-xs-12 last-sm first-xs center-xs">
                             <img src="/img/secure-monero.png" alt="Secure safe" class="main-icon">
@@ -52,14 +52,14 @@ Title: Home
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12 why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is private.</h3>
-                            <p>Security of the blockchain normally increases at the cost of privacy. Monero is based on the Cryptonote application layer protocol, which allows for the security benefits of blockchain technology without any of the privacy trade-offs</p>
+                            <p>Monero uses ring signatures and ring confidential transactions to obfuscate the amounts, origins, and destinations of all transactions. Monero gains all the benefits of a decentralized cryptocurrency, without any of the standard privacy concessions. </p>
                         </div>
                         
                     </div>
                     <div class="row middle-xs info-block-row">
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12 why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is untraceable.</h3>
-                            <p>Sending and receiving addresses as well as transacted amounts are obfuscated. Transactions cannot be linked to a particular user or real-world identity.</p>
+                            <p>Sending and receiving addresses as well as transacted amounts are obfuscated because Monero is private by default. Transactions on the Monero blockchain cannot be linked to a particular user or real-world identity.</p>
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-4 col-xs-12 last-sm first-xs center-xs">
                             <img src="/img/untraceable-monero.png" alt="Untraceable Monero paths" class="main-icon">
@@ -71,7 +71,7 @@ Title: Home
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12 why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is fungible.</h3>
-                            <p>Privacy is always-on. Therefore Monero is fungible, meaning  Monero will never be blacklisted by exchanges or vendors due to its association in previous transactions.</p>
+                            <p> Monero is fungible because it is private by default. In its current state, it is extremely unlikely that Monero will ever be blacklisted by exchanges or vendors due to its association in previous transactions.</p>
                         </div>
                     </div>
                 </div>