From 9a6d99e7b6ab04fec6e795244b8c23757789b0b6 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: tyrionmcmaster <31110358+tyrionmcmaster@users.noreply.github.com>
Date: Tue, 22 Aug 2017 14:25:14 -0400
Subject: [PATCH 1/3] Update Home Page

Please review and comment.
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 index.html | 12 ++++++------
 1 file changed, 6 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-)

diff --git a/index.html b/index.html
index 95b2d112..26a91c52 100644
--- a/index.html
+++ b/index.html
@@ -20,8 +20,8 @@ Title: Home
                         <div class="main-info">
                             <h1 id="main-h1">Monero</h1>
                             <h2 id="main-h2">Private Digital Currency</h2>
-                            <p id="main-text">Monero is a secure, private, untraceable currency. It is open-source and freely available to all. With Monero, you are your own bank. Only 
-                            you control and are responsible for your funds; your accounts 
+                            <p id="main-text">Monero is a secure, private and untraceable cryptocurrency. It is open-source and accessible to all. With Monero, you are your own bank. Only 
+                            you control and are responsible for your funds. Your accounts 
                             and transactions are kept private from prying eyes.</p>
                             <p><a href="/get-started/using/" class="btn-link btn-auto btn-primary">Get Started</a></p>
                         </div>
@@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ Title: Home
                     <div class="row middle-xs info-block-row private">
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12  why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is secure.</h3>
-                            <p>Monero can't be hacked to steal your funds, due to the power of distributed consensus, which you can read about here. This means that you are responsible for your money, and don't have to trust any entity to keep it safe for you.</p>
+                            <p>Monero cannot be hacked to steal your funds, due to its decentralized nature. Only you are responsible for securing your Monero.</p>
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-4 col-xs-12 last-sm first-xs center-xs">
                             <img src="/img/secure-monero.png" alt="Secure safe" class="main-icon">
@@ -52,14 +52,14 @@ Title: Home
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12 why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is private.</h3>
-                            <p>The power of the blockchain usually increases security at the cost of privacy, but with Monero's sophisticated privacy-centric technology, you get all of the security benefits of the blockchain without any of the privacy trade-offs.</p>
+                            <p>Security of the blockchain normally increases at the cost of privacy. Monero is based on the Cryptonote application layer protocol, which allows for the security benefits of blockchain technology without any of the privacy trade-offs</p>
                         </div>
                         
                     </div>
                     <div class="row middle-xs info-block-row">
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12 why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is untraceable.</h3>
-                            <p>By taking advantage of ring signatures, Monero makes it ambiguous which funds have been spent, and thus extremely unlikely that a transaction could be linked to particular user.</p>
+                            <p>Sending and receiving addresses as well as transacted amounts are obfuscated. Transactions cannot be linked to a particular user or real-world identity.</p>
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-4 col-xs-12 last-sm first-xs center-xs">
                             <img src="/img/untraceable-monero.png" alt="Untraceable Monero paths" class="main-icon">
@@ -71,7 +71,7 @@ Title: Home
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12 why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is fungible.</h3>
-                            <p>Because of the on-by-default nature of the privacy technologies, Monero is fungible, meaning one Monero will always be equal to another. This means you won't have to worry about Monero blacklisted by exchanges or vendors.</p>
+                            <p>Privacy is always-on. Therefore Monero is fungible, meaning  Monero will never be blacklisted by exchanges or vendors due to its association in previous transactions.</p>
                         </div>
                     </div>
                 </div>

From 602e4c29e19ae16074a8db45a46847b0c47e6e59 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: tyrionmcmaster <31110358+tyrionmcmaster@users.noreply.github.com>
Date: Wed, 23 Aug 2017 12:14:55 -0400
Subject: [PATCH 2/3] Update index.html

Thank you everyone for your input. Please let me know if this is an improvement.
---
 index.html | 10 +++++-----
 1 file changed, 5 insertions(+), 5 deletions(-)

diff --git a/index.html b/index.html
index 26a91c52..b87c4838 100644
--- a/index.html
+++ b/index.html
@@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ Title: Home
                         <div class="main-info">
                             <h1 id="main-h1">Monero</h1>
                             <h2 id="main-h2">Private Digital Currency</h2>
-                            <p id="main-text">Monero is a secure, private and untraceable cryptocurrency. It is open-source and accessible to all. With Monero, you are your own bank. Only 
+                            <p id="main-text">Monero is a secure, private, and untraceable cryptocurrency. It is open-source and accessible to all. With Monero, you are your own bank. Only 
                             you control and are responsible for your funds. Your accounts 
                             and transactions are kept private from prying eyes.</p>
                             <p><a href="/get-started/using/" class="btn-link btn-auto btn-primary">Get Started</a></p>
@@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ Title: Home
                     <div class="row middle-xs info-block-row private">
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12  why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is secure.</h3>
-                            <p>Monero cannot be hacked to steal your funds, due to its decentralized nature. Only you are responsible for securing your Monero.</p>
+                            <p>Monero is a decentralized cryptocurrency, meaning it is extremely difficult to hack and steal your funds. Transactions are confirmed by distributed consensus, and then immutably recorded on the blockchain. Third-parties do not need to be trusted to keep your Monero safe. </p>
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-4 col-xs-12 last-sm first-xs center-xs">
                             <img src="/img/secure-monero.png" alt="Secure safe" class="main-icon">
@@ -52,14 +52,14 @@ Title: Home
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12 why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is private.</h3>
-                            <p>Security of the blockchain normally increases at the cost of privacy. Monero is based on the Cryptonote application layer protocol, which allows for the security benefits of blockchain technology without any of the privacy trade-offs</p>
+                            <p>Monero uses ring signatures and ring confidential transactions to obfuscate the amounts, origins, and destinations of all transactions. Monero gains all the benefits of a decentralized cryptocurrency, without any of the standard privacy concessions. </p>
                         </div>
                         
                     </div>
                     <div class="row middle-xs info-block-row">
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12 why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is untraceable.</h3>
-                            <p>Sending and receiving addresses as well as transacted amounts are obfuscated. Transactions cannot be linked to a particular user or real-world identity.</p>
+                            <p>Sending and receiving addresses as well as transacted amounts are obfuscated because Monero is private by default. Transactions on the Monero blockchain cannot be linked to a particular user or real-world identity.</p>
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-4 col-xs-12 last-sm first-xs center-xs">
                             <img src="/img/untraceable-monero.png" alt="Untraceable Monero paths" class="main-icon">
@@ -71,7 +71,7 @@ Title: Home
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12 why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is fungible.</h3>
-                            <p>Privacy is always-on. Therefore Monero is fungible, meaning  Monero will never be blacklisted by exchanges or vendors due to its association in previous transactions.</p>
+                            <p> Monero is fungible because it is private by default. In its current state, it is extremely unlikely that Monero will ever be blacklisted by exchanges or vendors due to its association in previous transactions.</p>
                         </div>
                     </div>
                 </div>

From 3cb118d3637095c82c844c202f2666c5bfd2e56d Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: tyrionmcmaster <31110358+tyrionmcmaster@users.noreply.github.com>
Date: Thu, 24 Aug 2017 23:50:52 -0400
Subject: [PATCH 3/3] Update index.html

---
 index.html | 2 +-
 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)

diff --git a/index.html b/index.html
index b87c4838..e86e691e 100644
--- a/index.html
+++ b/index.html
@@ -59,7 +59,7 @@ Title: Home
                     <div class="row middle-xs info-block-row">
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-8 col-xs-12 why-text">
                             <h3>Monero is untraceable.</h3>
-                            <p>Sending and receiving addresses as well as transacted amounts are obfuscated because Monero is private by default. Transactions on the Monero blockchain cannot be linked to a particular user or real-world identity.</p>
+                            <p>Sending and receiving addresses as well as transacted amounts are obfuscated by default. Transactions on the Monero blockchain cannot be linked to a particular user or real-world identity.</p>
                         </div>
                         <div class="col-lg-6 col-md-6 col-sm-4 col-xs-12 last-sm first-xs center-xs">
                             <img src="/img/untraceable-monero.png" alt="Untraceable Monero paths" class="main-icon">